[Look at this paragraph closely. Virtually every one of your sentences makes a statement then repeats the same exact point in the next sentence. Avoid this, by asking why is it important for society to create these standards? Why reward people for conforming?] .
Why is America so accepting of these body image standards? [Unfortunately, you don't answer this question in the paragraph, though it's very important to your paper.] America is a place .
where the individual is a highly respected person. [Awk phrasing.] Hard work and self-control are the most .
prided [Awk.]characteristics in American culture. Women learn that working hard to keep this ideal .
body and having self-control over ones [possessive] body will be looked upon as a great achievement. .
By doing so they will be rewarded with the better life that the better-looking women have. If .
you are fat, you are viewed as being last and having no self-control and they know this. .
Advertisements keep pushing women to have better bodies, to try harder to achieve the .
ideal. [This all repeats the above paragraph.].
"One out of every four college women has an eating disorder. A psychological study .
in 1995 found that three minutes spent looking at models in fashion magazines caused .
70% of women to feel depressed, guilty and shameful. 50% of American women are dieting .
and 75% of "normal- weight women think they are too fat- (47). [Guide this quote.] Even women who are fully .
aware of the standardizing of body types conform to it. They know that because society .
operates in this manor, they have to be thin to get ahead. Society not only judges women, .
but women judge themselves. Other women especially thin women are constant reminders .
that they must be the ideal. [Why? In a country based on freedom, why can't people live and let live?] Most women are in competition with one another. [Why?] If you can be .
thinner than her than you can be better than her.